About Me 2020

Art

The brush hits my paper and reveals the beginning of my existence. 

The long strokes of brown paint create the dark complexion of my skin. 

Thinner black strokes for my long lashes that flutter dramatically in the warm breeze as my eyes stare curiously under the night sky. 

The luminous stars create patterns that are splattered by the frayed ends of the paint brush. 

Yellow and white dabs of paint represent the growing dandelions in the freshly cut bright green grass that I continuously picked with my tiny hands as a child. 

Blowing the seeds from its stem and slowly watching them float away into the eternity of the sky. 

Sing

Musical melodies play frequently in my mind. One imaginary note after another.

My heart pounds as the words flow effortlessly out of my mouth. 

I take a glimpse of the girl who was burdened with silence. The words in desperation of escape but hindered by the ones around her. 

As the years followed, so did her desire to speak and to break down the barrier of the tall brick wall. 

The flow of music is powerful now as my posture straightens, engulfing  every moment of what passes through me.

Read

One long sentence after another. 

I feel the smooth pages underneath my skin. 

I hear the sound of the flip of one page after another revealing the next chapter of my life. 

Smelling crisp new pages with the freshly printed words of more new beginnings

 

Sprint

The lanes of the track extend further into the future.

My arms are at a ninety degree angle. Head held down low in concentration.

My past flashes past me as I accelerate to the end of the finish line. 

As I relay, the memories of my past replay in my head.


I decided to take a different approach to represent who I am this year by compiling the things that I love to do and relating each category of either my past, present, or my future. I felt much more confident writing this piece because I feel more comfortable sharing and expressing myself as opposed to last year which had limited my writing options. I love the first line my short poem ,”The brush hits my paper and reveals the beginning of my existence,” because it emphasizes how something as simple as a paintbrush can symbolically create the existence of ones life. The change of identity is also prevalent with the theme of my blog. In the past the colors were a dark blue and black. Now I have an ombre color of bright blue and green colors which matches better with the theme of my posts.

6 thoughts on “About Me 2020

  1. Dear Mariam,

    Your “About Me” is amazing :D! I really enjoyed the poetic touch that you added to this piece. My favorite part of your piece overall is “Thinner black strokes for my long lashes that flutter dramatically in the warm breeze as my eyes stare curiously under the night sky”, a portion that I could truly visualize in my head. I love how you worded your “About Me” as a whole. I found the use of your interests (art, singing, reading, and track) to be extremely clever and easy-to-read.

    The one factor that you could work on is grammar in general. Some of the sentences are run-on or short sentences. The format of your “About Me” is good, but it could be better, in my opinion. For example, this portion seems cut-off and choppy,

    “I hear the sound of the flip of one page after another revealing the next chapter of my life.

    Smelling crisp new pages with the freshly printed words of more new beginnings”

    The reader (me, obviously) can understand you a lot better after reading this. Good job, and I can’t wait to see your writing throughout the semester.

    Love,
    Cindy <3

    • Dear Cindy,
      Thank you for reading my piece! I’m glad that you liked it. I appreciate the feedback that you have given me, as I myself recognize that I need to work on my run on sentences.

      Sincerely,
      Mariam

  2. Dear Mariam,

    Your About Me was written beautiful , it was easy and clear to understand your interest.You incorporated aspects of yourself that made me feel like I was truly getting to know you.My favorite part was “As the years followed, so did her desire to speak and to break down the barrier of the tall brick wall.” It really shows how you have developed in your confidence and feeling more comfortable with your self.

    The only thing I would say to work on is your grammar , Just changing up your sentence structure added some variety to make the piece flow a little better. Over all this piece was very beautiful to read.

    Sincerely,
    Khushi

    • Dear Khushi,
      Thank you for taking the time to read my piece! I am glad that you liked my poem and I will try my best to fix my grammar for the next piece that I create, as I myself recognize that I need to fix this.

      Sincerely,
      Mariam

  3. Dear Mariam,

    Your style in this piece is incredible and very engaging. Your use of your interests as introductions to both your writing style and you as a person was a really creative take that instantly caught my attention. I hope to read more of your works this semester.

    Sincerely,
    Kat

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